Of Agoness by iArtichokeu. We appreciate the feedback, the comments, the honesty – and I promise wholeheartedly to take on board the issues raised. As a reader, I always want to get the best out of a story, and I also want to do that as a writer – every reader owns the story as they read it, and how they see or feel it is important to me. I don’t want the reader to see and feel it exactly as I did, but I want to know how they did, if it’s the same, if it’s different.
As a kid, when I created and spoke stories to my siblings, I’d ask them afterwards what they thought it was about, what it meant. One sister had a very defined line of understanding. To her, it was always a straight line, everything was exactly as spoken, and there was nothing hidden, no subtext. Two other sisters liked to argue over a particular element or part of the story, saying it meant this, not that, or that it didn’t mean anything to one but it did to the other. My brother was quite literal. He did some between the lines, but liked to be within the character he liked the most (not always the main character, and not always male – he did like magic and wizardry, but not the sort that required latin or other fancy words), and he found things from the story that weren’t in the words at all. Two sisters (yes, almost the last of the siblings) liked to listen to the drone of the voice so they could go to sleep, and they didn’t ever remember the story the next day. One (the last sibling) didn’t like stories at all. She liked music, and the only reason she listened was to hear the music and choreography of the words that created the play in her head. She dreamed it as she heard it, but didn’t really care what the story was about. To her it wasn’t a journey, but a song within a play; a theatre, and not a world. For her, a world was too big to deal with.
Can a writer ever say anything the short way? I don’t seem to be able to do that, so, here’s what I’m meant to be saying.
Comments and critiques are appreciated. Thank you very much to the people who have read or reviewed my stories. If you also read them and want to offer some words, let me know. I like to hear from you (and I might even tell the other collaborating author, but don’t tell her that!).